Traffic congestion is becoming a huge problem for many major cities. Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce traffic in big cities

IELTS Writing Task 2: ‘traffic’ topic

Today I’d like to show you a good essay by one of my students. This is the essay question:

Traffic congestion is becoming a huge problem for many major cities. Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce traffic in big cities.

I gave the student’s essay a band 7, mainly because it contains some really good topic vocabulary. Open the file below to see the full essay, grammar corrections and my comments.

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Hopefully you can see that the student has followed my advice. He focuses on answering the question, there is a clear structure, and there is enough ‘band 7’ vocabulary.

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Feedback:
• Good introduction: you introduce the topic and answer the question in a simple way.
• You give 2 solutions which are organised in 2 good paragraphs. Each paragraph
develops the main point well. Good examples for each point.
• Ideas are well-linked and developed logically.
• You use some ‘band 7’ vocabulary e.g. on the increase, tackle a problem, prices that are
affordable, discourage people, raise money, congestion charge.
• Excellent conclusion to summarise the ideas.
• The essay could be improved by reducing the number of small mistakes. However, there
are several sentences that contain no mistakes at all.
• Overall, band 7